Thursday, July 26, 2012

A Cold Kiss

The dust I hold in my hands
spill a ray of light in the dark

I hear the accents which speak
through rain and shine

My heart sways from kindling fire
to a thin cut of ice

How do I stay warm
when the kiss you left behind
turns to snow?

The tone is sweet and still
left to breathe in a sour thrill

Worn out by the way
that you tear me in

Love grows in liquid gloss
Hate heals this blissful loss

I watch my heart drift away
on the lifeless margin of the sparkling sea

Written for dVerse Poets as a contemplation on what is balanced

32 comments:

  1. Really good study in contrasts, Archna. Sweet/sour, warm/cold. Nicely done!

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    1. Hi Victoria! Thank you for leading us in this direction. Definitely a fun prompt! I'm having a bit of difficulty making my way to you though. ?

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  2. We can so tell the difference too can't we? Between a heart warming kiss and one that is begrudged to us. This is such a chilling read from you yet, life is not all sweetness and light, either, is it.
    Lovely (sad) read.

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    1. No it isn't. Without the parts that are sour and stale it is hard to decipher the sweet and light.

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  3. really nice contrasts in this...each verse its own...tear me in and worn out is def a fav as it is unusual....hate healing too is an odd pairing...def feeling the mixed emotions as well...i like...smiles.

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    1. There has to be an acceptance of the other side in order to allow growth. I'm glad you enjoyed, smiles.

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  4. I agree with everyone... really enjoyed the contrasts.

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    1. Thanks Laurie! I really enjoyed your weather piece as part of the prompt...the indecision in love metaphor was awesome!

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  5. "How do I stay warm when the kiss you left behind turns to snow?" That's poignant. I really like it!

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  6. Beautiful. Love the short rhymes "Love grows in liquid gloss
    Hate heals this blissful loss". Your work always amazes me.

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    1. Thank you so much, Jen. It's nice to see you. :)

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  7. Love this:
    "How do I stay warm
    when the kiss you left behind
    turns to snow?"

    This:
    "Love grows in liquid gloss"

    And this:
    "I watch my heart drift away
    on the lifeless margin of the sparkling sea"

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  8. I like the contrast specially:

    How do I stay warm
    when the kiss you left behind
    turns to snow?

    Lovely share ~

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  9. Those niveous kisses a stab to the heart in this wonderful exploration of contrasts.

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    1. I like the way that you summed it up, Anna, thank you!

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  10. its beautiful and well balanced...nice! The second last lines are so good...

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  11. Wonderful words, love the rhythm, beautifully balanced

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  12. I am glad I came across your blog ... the poetry is so warm and intense !!!

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    1. What a lovely thing to say, thanks so much Green Speck!

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  13. Pls Visit this link....http://writingonjusttowrite.blogspot.in/2012/07/an-appreciation.html
    Sreeja.

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    1. This is a lovely gesture, thank you Sreeja!

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  14. There's so much that love and pain reveal about ourselves. I think your poem brings this truth to life so vividly, contrasting the dimensions of emotional and spiritual growth and death; a true dialectic that transcends trite verisimilitude. You put us right into the experience, and we are richer for it.

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    1. Yes, there is more than one reflective dimension for each of these emotions. Our preservation and endurance truly highlights who we are. Thank you so much for carefully reading and for your introspection.

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  15. A beautiful, contemplative tone as I read it out loud for a second, and then a third time. Especially the lines from the fourth verse onward.. Beautiful.. I have watched that love drift away.. Yes indeed.

    Leo

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